Saturday, April 2, 2011

Cool Pitch Contest

Shelley Watters is offering a cool contest: write a twitter pitch--140 characters or less--and submit it to her blog on April 3. Such a great idea!

Grand Prize: a full manuscript request from agent Suzie Townsend!

Here's my pitch, in rough draft form:

Title: A BLIND EYE
Genre: YA Suspense/Romance.
Word Count: 54,000

The literary version:

Some are born blind. For others, tragedy leaves them blind. Then there are those who simply refuse to see. This is a story about all three.

The action version:

When Chris finds a blind girl hiding in his car, his attempt to runaway becomes a race to save her from death by scientific experimentation.


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14 comments:

  1. AnonymousApril 2, 2011 at 10:15 AM

    I like it! I am not introduced to a character or the plot but I still get a good sense of the story. That is great.

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  2. AnonymousApril 2, 2011 at 11:15 AM

    top notch mrs. daines! the past 24 hours of reading pitches has been so inspirational, educational, and enjoyable. your pitch got my attention instantly and i want to read this book!
    douglas esper

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  3. RuthyApril 2, 2011 at 12:02 PM

    Classy. I'd love to know more.

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  4. Elizabeth BriggsApril 2, 2011 at 12:10 PM

    This is really good, but kinda vague. I'd like to know more about the characters, conflict, and stakes.

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  5. Eliza TiltonApril 2, 2011 at 2:00 PM

    I agree with Elizabeth. It's vague, but intriguing. If you have any room, try and throw in a tidbit of the main conflict.

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  6. AnonymousApril 2, 2011 at 3:01 PM

    my wife pointed out to me i made this comment right after i cleaned the bathroom...so indeed it was after the toilets! (not to mention as bad as my eye sight and attitude is i probably qualify for at least 2 of your categories)
    douglas esper

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  7. Julie DainesApril 2, 2011 at 3:17 PM

    @dougfashiondisco: Unfortunately, we can never escape real life. And toilets are the epitome of real life. I guess that's why we write fiction... :)

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  8. AnonymousApril 2, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    Alright. So I said I liked your first pitch but I LOVE your second pitch. I get a better idea of the story and I am hooked. Now I want to read your book!

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  9. Heather M. GardnerApril 2, 2011 at 6:02 PM

    I feel you! I liked the first one too! But I understand why everyone wanted to see more from us. Peer pressure caused me to rewrite.

    The second one is still good and sounds very interesting. Thanks for sharing and best of luck.

    And thank you for your comment about my Twitter pitch. Come see the new one if you want.
    HMG

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  10. AnonymousApril 2, 2011 at 6:44 PM

    I LOVE the first one! The second one tells more about the story, but the first one grabs at my heart and my mind. Either way, this is a story I definitely want to read!

    Thanks for your comment on my pitch, and best of luck!

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  11. M.J. FifieldApril 2, 2011 at 7:08 PM

    I really liked the first pitch. I agree that the second tells more about the story but I really love the way the first one is written. It's great.


    M.J. Fifield
    My Pet Blog

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  12. UnknownApril 2, 2011 at 7:41 PM

    I would choose #1 over #2 - the wording is lovely. Too bad you can't somehow combine the two pitches. The first one is so great - but leaves me wondering what the book is about.
    -Buffi
    My Wonderfully Dysfunctional Blog

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  13. YamileApril 2, 2011 at 8:25 PM

    So tough to choose just one! I think #1 is fantastic! Yes, we don't know who the MC is/are, but the themes of the book immediately hook me. I love it!

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  14. Julie DainesApril 3, 2011 at 10:41 AM

    @Yamile: I couldn't fit his whole name in the 140 characters! :)

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